There is so much good stuff to say about today’s paper!
LOVING the photography in this issue! Great shots by Anna from the ceramics event to the heat wave spread on page 10. I love that we thought to do a warm day photo spread!!! Excellent idea by the eds, and well executed by Anna and the photo staff! Also, Todd’s page 8 basketball shot was powerful and played deservedly large. Nice work!
Also loving the anecdotal leads! Lana’s elbow-deep-in-clay wee one was about as cute an image as I can recall. And she kept up the color and atmosphere throughout the story! Perfectly reported and written… Couldn’t ask for a better story.
Harold also turns in a fabulous piece on our talented ISU student headed to reality TV. His singing-in-the-shower lead and strong quotes make that story a great read! Also, it’s a great idea to have the Facebook mention in the breakout! That’s a cool way to link the story to an online venue.
Robin’s feature on the 7th & Elm bar is a solid business feature. Too often, such pieces can come across as overly promotional. Robin’s story, however, sticks to the facts and focuses on relevant description. Good work!
Kudos to Ben and the gang for a couple of sharp Sports pages! The design elements and story content have been consistently solid! The profile is a great feature and the dominant art makes a real impact in this issue.
Welcome to Allison Christner! Her SGA story is a solid effort. Lots of good information there.
… we had run a grid or other breakout for the SGA positions. The story is good, but it devolves into a list. Could we have created a breakout listing the position, duties, hourly commitment, etc.? That would make the story shorter and the information more scan-able.
… we had held the psychology experiment piece and turned it into a feature on one or two of the experiments going on? That would allow us to get some photos of people with wires taped to their foreheads, etc., and use the recruitment aspect of the story as a sidebar. The story, as is, seems to skirt some of the interesting findings and aims of the research, but I think there is a lot more to be found.
Watch out for…
… using somewhat obscure Web sites or organization names without explaining what they are. For example, the handsandvoices.org site, I assume, has something to do with deaf people. But it isn’t clear to me why we are using that site to get information on Marlee Matlin, instead of using the Internet Movie Database, or her own Web site, http://www.marleematlinsite.com.
We need to be sure we are using the most relevant sites to get background information on people and events in our paper. The women’s history month story today also mentioned the site infoplease.com, which appears to have nothing to do with women’s history. Our credibility suffers if we don’t use the very best and most relevant information available.
… the dreaded effect/affect error. Our SGA story quotes Michael Scott Jr. championing the ability to “effect change”; it should be “affect change.” Effect is a noun; it means the result of some event. Affect is a verb and most commonly means to cause some event.
… breaking a Web site in a weird place. Web sites are hard to design around because they can be so long. We broke the America’s Got Talent site after the http:, which is a little odd. Better to keep the whole site together and reduce the size, or increase the size of the box if possible.
… “manufactured” beef patties in the 7th & Elm feature. While this is technically true — like it or not, we do have an industrial food system — it might be better to say “produced” or “packaged.” Manufactured gives it a mechanical feel not typical of food products.
… Congress/congressional. Our story on page 5 refers to a “Congress meeting,” but when Congress is used as an adjective, it becomes lowercased and “congressional.” Also, because of our bicameral system, it’s unusual for “Congress” to vote on bills during one group’s visit. It would be better to describe whether they visited the House of Representatives or the Senate, and which bills were being taken up at the time.
… AP Style on temperature. AP dictates that we spell out “degrees,” rather than using the symbol, as we did on the page 10 cutline.
… Anna/Annie. Our credit line on page 6 refers to her as “Annie.”